Grace Tutt

Journal #13

 When thinking of my revision process, there were a couple major things that stood out to me. I wrote my first draft, and it was messy and It just looked like I threw all my ideas on the  paper and rambled on about them, not really tying my ideas together with one another. So I went and I printed off the three student essays and annotated them and wrote down notes of where I could use them and what they would contrast best with. It made my essay draft #2 a lot cleaner I could take a good chunk of information out of the first draft that was just not beneficial to my writing. This also helped me connect my paragraphs, they flow better now and it helped me organize where I wanted the information to go and where I wanted it to line up. Lastly, the final thing that I focused on to help me revise my essay was my thesis. I had a thesis but I stated it at first as a question and that left room for confusion and I wasn’t holding a very strong stance on my essay, so by making my thesis stronger and a statement rather than a question it gave me a pathway for my essay.  All of these three things I really focused on, and they all helped me take out information that wasn’t needed and helped me really tie in the information I did have, connect better with the other information and all of my sources and points weave better together with each other.